Please, Mind The Gap (In Your Manuscripts, of course!)

For our British readers out there, I must say that one phrase which has stuck with me during the years after my visits to London, is “Please, mind the gap.” For those who don't know what I'm talking about, it is a very literal warning announced in London's underground train system. There is usually a gap between the platform and the train, and you must mind it or else trip up, or slip a leg through the gap.

Oddly enough, the recording that plays repetitively in the tunnels, rang loud in my memory as I went through and polished my recent manuscript.

“Please mind the gap,” the women's British accent pronounced the words as I came upon my own wordy gaps. (Yet another reason polishing is so necessary before the big send off.)

Mind these gaps as you polish, to avoid your reader tripping into the pit of unbelievability:

Physical gaps: These are easy fixes...usually just adding a sentence to bridge the gap. Say your character is sitting in a chair having a conversation. As the dialogue heats up, she suddenly slams the door and rushes down the hall. When did she get up from her chair? Look out for these...even though they are simple, they can contribute to confusion and frustration on the reader's part.


Emotional gaps: This gets a little more tricky. My example is: My heroine lashes out at someone out of jealousy, and although she thinks her way through to resolve, the next encounter with that person (who witnessed the jealous outburst) must address her past behavior in some way, and then SHOW that she has now replaced it with a different emotion (say contentment). This can be done using dialogue and action tags. Basically, you can't just depend on deep pov in one character, to smooth over a bump in her relationship with another character. It must be shown.


Plot gaps: Have you ever read a book where the hero and heroine despise each other and then suddenly they can't take their eyes off each other? Hopefully if you have, there were some plot elements that developed that attraction. One of my biggest pet peeves in Hollywood, is when a movie doesn't fill in the plot gaps, and suddenly the character arc is more like a character pole vault. Plot must work TOWARD character development, if your characters take off and leave plot behind, then you'll have a lot of gaps to fill.

Can you think of any other gaps in the writing process? Would you be willing to give a concrete example from your own wip?

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Angie Dicken first began writing fiction as a creative outlet during the monotonous, mothering days of diapers and temper tantrums. She is passionate to impress God's love on women regardless of their background or belief. This desire serves as a catalyst for Angie's fiction, which weaves salvation and grace themes across historical cultures and social boundaries. Angie is an ACFW member and is represented by Tamela Hancock Murray of the Steve Laube Agency.

Flaws, Pride, and the Love that Conquers

I recently read To Win Her Heart by Karen Witemeyer and was enthralled by the simple beauty of Levi and Eden's story, as well as the deep truths embedded within. *spoiler alert* Please don't read if you are planning to read this book and don't want to know details.

While the romance between blacksmith Levi Grant and librarian Eden Spencer was heart thumping and sigh worthy, what I loved about this book was the theme of grace and forgiveness.

Levi Grant had served time in prison for involuntary manslaughter. He is now a Christ follower, living a life of peace and trying to start life anew. Sure there are time when he struggles with his vow to remain a peaceful man, but he has a heart for God and wants to live right. But when his past comes to light, he is judged by his past instead of the way he has lived since....judged by hypocrites who are hiding their own secrets.

Eden Spencer is basically a snob. She has lived her life above reproach and doesn't want any associations with people who might tarnish her reputation. So when she is asked to take in a kitchen maid from the saloon/brothel, she is appalled...what would the town think? To her credit she takes the girl and suffers for it - the town all but shuns her.

The wonderful thing about this book is how God's love is spread through the actions of Levi and Eden. They take on the shunned ones who want a better life, but haven't been given a chance. They stand up for them, no matter the cost. They stand firm until others begin to see God's love and respond in kind. That's true love.

Another thing I loved was the pastor and his wife. They are non-judgmental when it comes to Levi and are the ones who help him to get a job. While Eden is upset when she learns of his past, his gentle ways and his heart shine through to reveal a man covered by Jesus's forgiveness.

We all have flaws. We all have things we aren't proud of. But God is a God who forgives. He loves the unlovable. He stand up for the weak. He lifts up the downtrodden..just a we should.

When have you stood up for what is right, no matter the cost? When have you befriended someone who has been shunned because of appearances or environment?

Let's open our eyes and look for those we can share God's love with. Kindness will make the difference.

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 Sherrinda Ketchersid

Sherrinda is wife to "Pastor John" and mother to three giant sons and one gorgeous daughter. A born and bred Texan, she writes historical romance filled with fun, faith, and forever love.